Music Video Feedback

After releasing our first cut of our music video and explain to the audience the narrative that we are hoping to achieve they had some feedback and improvements that could help us to develop our video more.
 This feedback is from a year 9 class slightly below our target audience but what they had to say was very useful.

These are us a few quotes that the students had written down when asked these 3 questions
1. What is the narrative for this music video?
2. What is the genre of this music video?
3. Any improvements you would suggest?

"1.The narrative for this music video is that the husband is going to war and the wife is imagining what it will be like for him."
"2. The genre of this music video is action because it is about war"
"3. The improvements for this video; - make it clearer that its the husband going to war and not the wife"

We are glad that they understood what is the narrative of the music video and that and that the genre of the video is action because it is about war and that is very action based. We are planing to make it clear at the end that it is actually the father that goes of to war and not the mother.

Another feedback that we received

"1. Shows girl going to war when actually its the guy"
"2. Upbeat"
"3. Use different filters to show the different emotions of what happens"

"1. The events we see when the wife goes to war is actually events which will happen to her husband and we see at the end that the husband leaves"
"2. Upbeat"
"3.Use different angles with the camera"

"1. Going to war (girl) but actually it was her husband's experience"
"3. Maybe make the storyline a bit clearer"

This feedback allows us to know that what we need to improve on is that they understand the narrative but would like it to be more clearer because at the moment some of them are still confused. Keeping in mind that they are not exactly our target audience but there feedback will help us for when we show our finished music video to our actual target audience and then we will ask them for their feedback as well.